Broekn
Inevitably, it breaks.
Never seeing color, only gray.
Slowly, losing it all, into pieces, colorless, pieces
A black hole has opened up and
Nothing is left untouched.
Every part is pulled in twisting it, until I can't recognize myself.
It is far better to grasp the universe as it really is than to persist in delusion, however satisfying and reassuring. -Carl Sagan
Times change, worlds change, but people, people never change.
What had started as an arduous project is now one of my passions. I love to write; this is where I try to paint pictures--with words. I'm a sophomore in high school, if you're wondering.
Need to contact me for some reason? My email is dsrandhawa3244@gmail.com.
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Dilpreet
4 comments:
I love this one, there's alot of emotion. It's a little dark but I can definitely connect to it. And I like that you spelled the word Broken wrong on purpose. It just took me a little while to get it haha. Keep writing ones like this!
i was going to say that this rhymes, but it doesnt.
yet the words somehow fit together so perfectly and poetically that it has the same graceful effect.
i especially like the ambiguity, you leaving specifics to the reader
and i already told you what it makes me think of
This is a clear vision into feelings of quiet desperation. Well done.
Dilbert, I love this one, and I agree with Abby, the way you spelled broekn wrong is so cool, great idea. (: Also the emotions are really easy to fell and I can connect to those emotions too. Great job and I want to read some more new stuff, so get on to write more! :D
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