Hey all, I think this is the first post I've ever had that didn't have any sort of poetry/stream of consciousness. What I'm typing this for is something regarding the comments. I really do not want really short comments with "This is awesome!" in it. In the end it doesn't really help me, and although the compliments are nice, I really want an additional "this could be done better", or anything like that. Here's an example of something that benefited me, it's a comment that Mr J posted. (Regarding Red and Orange)
"Nice. Take out the word perfect, and paradise to let the reader feel those ideas you already embedded so well in the poem. I was with you. You don't need to state that part. That's how poetry works; you don't tell the reader the conclusion. Instead, let them draw it for themselves."
That's almost exactly what I want to be reading on here. Well, that's all I really have to say. Constructive criticism is a must, and from here on out I won't be accepting the word "perfect" to be in your comments. :D
-Dilpreet
PS. Thanks for reading guys. Just reading it does mean a lot.
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